The people who ended up buying a creative stuff were going to do it anyway, and the people who were going to sell it do so slightly more often. Now they do it on your website, because a search led them there!
The "Route to Market" slide changes are pretty funny. You're microoptimizing for how concrete you should state, "We're sending spam to Craigslist, Dribbble, and Behance users to find stuff to sell, and we're cramming Google to find buyers." It's smart from a business point of view, though utterly indefensible.
Never mind that your post is a submarine advertisement. There's something about your deck and how you write that's very off-putting, like a synthesis of different startup personality tropes.
It's ironic, because people who are actually really creative—who will deliver the best value for presumably your customers—would have an allergic reaction to this article. Maybe the mediocre sellers and desperate buyers won't.
Does Twine concentrate mediocrity? That's my takeaway from the deck. It's probably unfair.
I'm sure what was said when the deck was presented was far more influential
1. Kept it under 15 slides
2. Used tight copy to succinctly get across what they do, why they're doing it, what their "angle" is and how big the space is
3. Illustrated some traction and hustle
4. Showed the team wasn't completely wet behind the years (and that they could successfully recruit and execute)
5. Outlined a plausible initial growth strategy
6. Signalled some social proof: from early investors and happy users
7. Wrapped it up in a clean design and sensible slide sequence
It's harder than it looks.
Edit: and that's just the deck. Chances are they will have had to plough hundreds of hours in to: networking, google+linkedin+crunchbase+angel list deep dives building a VC pipeline, reading countless money raising blogs/books/podcasts and practising their in-person pitch for when they do get a meeting (not to mention making sure their existing cap table wasn't fucked up from earlier FFF investments, if they had any). After all that comes a probable 75% to 95% rejection rate from the final list of VCs they drew up and managed to get a meeting with [and you have to keep the company moving, growing and developing while you do all of this].
Basically, if you're early stage and a founder who doesn't already have one or two notable previous wins under your belt, there's a lot of background shit you need to do before you even have a chance of getting in a room with a credible VC and winning them over with a slick sales pitch. An effective deck is one of those things.
* who are the founders and what is their experience?
* what is it? (freelance network for creatives)
* what is the size of the market? ($500b)
* what is the business model? (20% cut for arranging contracts)
* growth rate? (linear, but decent)
Things some people might want to know that were missing
* who are your competitors?
* how much are you asking for? for what portion of your company?
You say they're missing important metrics. What metrics are you looking for? They gave user growth, money in contracts posted in a month, and even gave user retention rate and contract acceptance rate.
They seem to be implying: 1) We got funded. 2) We worked hard on our pitch deck. 3) The effort on our pitch deck is why we got funded.
I don't see any reason that their first pitch deck is better than their 12th or their 23rd. Just because the 23rd investor liked their business plan doesn't make that pitch deck, or their strategies to improve it, correct.
From speaking with investors, we learned about better ways to get across what we are doing. What the key ares that interested investors, etc. Most of that we learned was from the actual conversation rather than specific feedback on the deck.
On a side note, the first version of this deck makes me slightly embarrassed. Even the "final" version does because the company has evolved since we closed our investment round.
Do your investors find that concerning at all?
They will be hated by everyone in the business and probably make boatloads of money.
I wanted to keep this is about the deck rather than our positioning and hope its helpful to someone.
The hard work is just beginning.
It was never the pitch deck, it was the traction that got them funded. If you have good traction and your pitch deck is not abysmal, then you can always raise money.
Edit: URLS not allowed so I can't do my brief properly... https://cl.ly/0C0K3z2n372c
Try here: https://www.slideshare.net/stuartlogan2002/the-pitch-deck-we...
Not everybody has the connections you do.
EDIT: it was a little funny though :)
