While I appreciate the spirit of what you are saying, the average time on page of 3 minutes 45 seconds (across 2k uniques) indicates most visitors are continuing past the paragraph you claim would be problematic.
Devils advocate: Do you know what the average time is to read the entire thing is? If it's 7.5 minutes, then one possible explanation is that your audience is split (50/50). Median time would be a much better indicator.
