True, there are better ways to word it. That does leave out some detail that the original one had, like test velocity and not showing the thought process as well (like a formula on a math slide or deductive argument in philosophy).

My main point is that the title claims thus slide is what killed 7 people and basically blames the creator, but leaves out all the other failures. Slide formatting and wording (which ignores the actual discussion that should have gone with it) is really inconsequential compared to the rest of the process in a briefing.